Pretty good.
I wouldn't repost this any higher output. It already clips a little. Louder isn't always better. Plus, people can just "turn it up" when they want it louder. Though I despise this generic pop/punk stuff, this fits right in all that stuff kids are listening to, nowadays. hahaha. Its just a personal preference thing. You don't lose any points for personal preference. :D
You wrote a pretty damn good song. There is a few timing issues here and there, but all in all, great job on this. Nice man. I give it a 5\m/